The premise sounding intriguing, so I gamely followed the murky, occasionally-hard-to-follow art through the funeral and homecoming visits until the main character's visit with an old girlfriend. Her first line after greetings is, "Can you believe it's been eighteen years since you took my cherry?" I assume that's plausible dialogue for someone, somewhere, but it yanked me right out of the story. The rest of the scene isn't as bad as that, but by the next scene I gave up and just skimmed the rest.
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